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Appreciate any feedback on this 1-pager for qrcoin.fun. Goal was to make it simple, accessible, and easy to understand, even for people who are not into crypto (yet).
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It all reads clearly to me. One very minor note would be potentially changing “points” in the second bullet point. The next bullet point clarifies but would maybe consolidate the two or change to something like directs to a website of your choosing, etc
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helpful thank you, i think the two questions and answers can remain separate but probably the first one with which you have an issue can be improved, i've considered a few alternatives as it can be a bit awkward phrasing. Breaking the sentence into 3 parts, wondering if any of these would be improvement for you: Part 1: The winner of the daily auction Part 2: a. decides (current) b. determines c. chooses d. controls Part 3: a. where the QR points for a day. (current) b. the link to which the QR points for a day. c. the website that the QR points to for a day.
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